Split my mind dude!
Master this shit(Y)!
I'm feeling mixed emotions here so bare with me :P.
OK, this is not a good demo I'm hearing. But the reason I also love this (I think I'm high right now XD) is because I'm hearing the basis for a GREAT song.
The beginning riffs are not something I'd want to hear on a Slayer record, Killswitch Engage, or any other metal band because it's a bit bland. I'd recommend a constant drum beat that ISN'T following the rhythm of the guitars, but diverse enough to get alot of attention. Which brings me to the guitars.
On a Metal track, I'd usually be hearing a rhythm guitar, with the lead doing something else (which is CRUCIAL for an instrumental). I hate it when both are playing the same thing, if they're leaving silent gaps in the middle (I'm referring to the first minute of this song). The melody there is great, but the rhythm (guitar) should be doing something to keep the song going during those dreadful silent moments. I know they're not long but they can be frustrating. Unless you're going for a Slipknot-esque thing.
On a more POSITIVE note, about 1:05 onward you DEFINITELY had a great thing going here. Reminds me of something I'd hear from Bullet For My Valentine. The problem with this part though is that it was hard to adjust from the HEAVY intro to the more METALCORE (google it if you don't know). 1:40 was a nice touch, and the change to the acoustic melody was a much more bearable transition. HOWEVER, I got really bored at hearing the same thing for 30-40 seconds. I'm aware there was a lead part playing but I wish it was longer.
We're back to the heavy stuff now and again, you might want to improve the transition there aswell.
The BEST part of the entire piece was 3:27 and you had an amazing little thing going on there mate! But again, the lead and rhythm are playing the same melody, leaving those irritable silent gaps in the middle >:(. Thankfully there were slightly less noticable so thank you for that!
Er...I think that just about covers it! I would suggest making another versions of this before you try vocals.
Please don't be disheartened by that 6, that's a nice 6! He wants to be your friend!....OK I'm high. Hope you didn't mind this pretty long review and I anticipate your future works!
You are very picky, but whatever floats your boat. This isn't exactly one of my best or most diverse works to come, but I'm sure you'd be a bit more satisfied from works off my upcomming album.
Seeing as you're still experimenting...
It's probably a bit too "major" sounding to fit that description you gave. And I most definitely do agree with what you said in your blog about trying to improve transitions between melodies because it's obvious here.
You're getting there though, as your original score for the Hard Justice finale was pretty impressive!
Sorry about the 6, but I can't do it to myself to be biased towards one of my favourite authors. Cue the mass number of hate-mails from 8-year old fans.....
Nice rhythm guitar notes, great melody, awful lyrics.
Use the word "fuck" all you want, but the problem is you just seemed to take whatever rhymed and threw it in the lyrics, and it didn't really have an impact as such. Not on me anyway. Unlike Metallica or another metal band with their lyrics (if you know what they're saying). I don't mind changes from a major sound to a minor sound, but it didn't really fit into this song. Especially with god-awful lyrics like that. It sounded improvised. And improvisation is good, but not when you release a song like this on a CD for $11.90 (which to me translates as £7. Which doesn't really seem worth it). I'm sure your fans would disagree, but oh well it's your life.
Everything else: 7/10
A pretty impressive song. One question though, there's a website (I won't say what it is to avoid deletion of this account) where producers of videos can get paid for their work. Now, obviously people can only get paid for their stuff if they hold all the copyrights for all the images and audio in the movie. Unless they get special permission. So I was just wondering if I can use a small part of this for the opning credits of a movie I'm working on. Please reply soon so I know.
Anyway back to the song:
Good shreding, could have added a Metallica type solo or something but pretty good though. I'm on my way to downloading it right now!
Sure, you can use some of it!
Just don't forget to give credit :D
Another Sweet delicious tune from Paragon! Good work
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